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LSPoorEeyorick
04-17-2006, 08:53 PM
To simply one's essence

To combine a multifaceted experience
into a single statement of desire
is impossible
and inescapable from time to time

Communications expert
looking for a position that
will utilize her talent
for turn of phrase

Handsome gentleman
seeks a discreet encounter

Couple moving into the city
in need of loving home
for their golden retrievers

If we are expected to
slice the words
off ourselves
where stands the sin
of omission?

Communications expert
looking for a position that
will utilize her talent
for turn of phrase
(on her favorite
internet website
on company time)

Handsome gentleman
seeks (respite from
distracted wife and
mother of two
who hasn't
sucked him
in ages, via)
a discreet encounter
(in your ass.
Don't expect flowers.)

Couple (of addicts)
moving (away from our parole officers)
into the city (across the border)
in need of (a couple of gullible souls who will
let them into their)
loving home for (a casing of)
their (electronics and)
golden (jewelry
so that they may) retrieve
(it later that night before
splitting the country.
Sucke)rs.

Perhaps it would be better
not to demand that we
dumb ourselves down
in twenty-five words
or less

CoasterMatt
04-17-2006, 09:35 PM
:snap: :snap:
Great stuff

tracilicious
04-17-2006, 10:02 PM
If we are expected to
slice the words
off ourselves
where stands the sin
of omission?


This is one of my favorite bits of imagery ever. I'd love to slice the words off myself.

Cadaverous Pallor
04-18-2006, 12:02 PM
Awesome concept, perfect execution, with lots of hoops to jump through. Very impressed. :snap:

Gemini Cricket
04-18-2006, 12:19 PM
Nicely done. It made me laugh. Good show!
:)

Eliza Hodgkins 1812
04-18-2006, 03:07 PM
This is one of my favorite bits of imagery ever. I'd love to slice the words off myself.

Mine, too. Mine, too. Love this, H. Well worth multiple reads! I think you should submit this to...someplace. I don't know where. McSweeny's? The New Yorker? I have no idea where one submits poetry, but you should.

lizziebith
04-19-2006, 10:33 AM
This is utterly clever and enjoyable -- yes, submit it for publication, you should! :snap:

Snowflake
04-19-2006, 11:54 AM
See, you NEEDED to quit your job. This kind of wordplay and turn of phrase needs to take the air and fly! Absolutely fabulous! If I could, I'd mojo you for this. Since I can't, :snap: :snap:

Boss Radio
04-25-2006, 12:09 AM
You have indeed snatched the pebble.
It was time to go.

Well done.

blueerica
04-25-2006, 12:41 AM
I dig it more and more each time I read it.

Janie
04-26-2006, 12:13 PM
Marvelous read.:snap: