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Gemini Cricket
08-02-2007, 04:38 PM
Elena
by: Me


What am I doing here? I asked myself as I stood next to three twentysomethings with lightning bolts drawn on their foreheads in a mall parking lot. Each wore a t-shirt that said “Wave My Wand”. It was 11:45 in the evening and I felt like shooting myself in the face. Still in my work clothes, I was adorned with a wrist band that assigned me a number and a place in line to obtain the book of the year at my local Barnes and Noble.

A lady on one side of me, who was trying to keep her distance from the “Wand” boys, attempted small talk.

“Did you read six?”

“Yes.” I said.

There was a long silence. I didn’t know where to take the conversation. Dare I talk about six and get into an hour long back and forth about Horcruxes and wand sizes? Instead I gave her a polite smile and a nod and that was about it.

An associate from the book store who lined us up, was dressed like Percy Weasley. Aim higher, young man. I said to myself.

“Fifteen minutes to midnight everyone!” He hooted. Expecting a happy response, he waved his hands in the air. The only thing he got in return was a look from an annoyed woman who rubbed her ears in disgust. She clutched her ten year old girl who was half asleep and looked like she didn’t really want to be there.

I’m a fu cking nerd. I told myself. But there was no way I was going to go the weekend or the next day even not knowing how the Potter tale would end. I was not going to go to work on Monday without myself armed with the knowledge of Harry’s fate and the truth about Snape. Yes, I’m a fu cking nerd. I can live with that.

To me, there’s a lot of fun in people watching. As long as your gaze never turns deeply into judgment of the subject, it can be very rewarding. So, I decided to look around as I do in airports and subway stations. Breathing in the inhabitants of the world that I never felt I truly belonged in.

That’s when I saw her.

She was no more than twelve. For some reason, I called her ‘Elena’ in my head.

Elena looked as if she had not been able to sleep for the past couple of days. Circles around her eyes, she clutched her brick red and gold scarf. Elena looked like she had not been outside in quite sometime. Her hair was rifled into two scrunchies placing two loose pigtails on either side of a round face. One tail was about to come undone.

It had struck me at that time that Elena and I were there alone. No partner, friend or parent. I looked around me and saw happy couples, hordes of gaggling Potterheads and even what looked like a coven complete with elf ears.

Whenever the crowd around us became excited or agitated as the case may be, Elena would wince as if someone had just fired a starting pistol in her ear. She gazed around herself as this group around her was made up of tall redwood trees looking down at her in disgust. The stained terrycloth shirt and shorts she was wearing indicated to me that she had dressed herself and was unprepared for it being as cool as it was tonight. Her attire looked like it has escaped from the reject pile at a nearby Goodwill. Her appearance made me despise her parents who were nowhere to be found.

The thickest glasses I have ever seen hid tears from people looking at her straight on. But, from the side, I could see them and at that moment in time felt them. I wanted to put my arm around her and tell her that the world was shi tty and that she would come into her own making her mark on this cruddy world. But of course I didn’t.

A young girl standing nearby clutched a pink fur-lined cell phone to her Hillary Duffed chest. Her gaze landed on Elena’s bottom, where the terrycloth revealed an outline of a pad sticking out in an odd angle right below her butt. The girl laughed instead of having an intimate little female football huddle with the younger girl. Had I been a mother, a Mrs. Weasley-type, I might have had that huddle with her, but being a man, I didn’t.

In no time at all, the line began to creep towards the entrance of the bookstore. We marched like columns of devout nuns to the St. Barnes of the Noble Church. From time to time, I assessed the line, looking forward griping here and there at inattentive wizards and lollygagging witches who hindered the line from moving. Elena looked at the ground as she walked. Dry spit had gathered at the corners of her mouth.

Before reaching the counter, the line snaked around a table mounted with Potter Books: big yellow tomes with that famous kid on it lifting his palm high in the air as if he expected someone to plop a wad of cash into it. And we did.

Elena had her cash in a sandwich bag. Rolled up ones, coins here and there and what looked like six receipts folded and battered stacked against her cash. She handed the sandwich bag to the tired man passing out the books and he informed her that the cashiers were ahead of her.
As I chose my book, making sure I didn’t get someone else’s reject, I lost sight of Elena.

I paid for my book and raced outside. I wanted to see her face now. Would it be any different? Would happiness replace the worry that seemed too familiar to her visage? I found her outside on a staircase leading to the parking lot below us. She sat on the steps hugging the book as if it were a newborn child. She wept.

Tears of joy? I wasn’t sure.

I lingered about pretending to read the first couple of pages, wondering what was to become of Elena that evening. People walked around Elena as if she were a smashed cat on a busy freeway. Every so often someone would bump into her. They made me hate them.

After five minutes or so, a pudgy woman with Elena’s face climbed the stairs to her. Her hair was recently released from a salon and Escada had allowed the dress to exist. She planted her fist into one hip and a frown cracked her face like an earthquake across a beige desert plain. She unleashed a claw to nab Elena by her upper arm, forcing her to her feet. Elena continued to look at the stairs at her feet.

Elena’s mother grabbed the book from her daughter with the swiftness of a hawk on a rat dinner. Elena looked up with clarity in her eyes. Her frown matched her mother’s and she snatched the book back. She shrugged her arm away from her mom’s grip and walked down the stairs before her mother. Elena’s mom stood with her mouth wide open while a bridge of spit connected her fat lips.

I watched as Elena walked down the steps with a smile on her face. She gazed at her retrieved treasure fondly, Mom in tow.

LSPoorEeyorick
08-02-2007, 05:05 PM
Brad, I think this is the best thing you've written. I was going to mojo you to say "that's saying a lot," but apparently I can't. So. That's saying a lot.

Kevy Baby
08-02-2007, 05:09 PM
Brad, I think this is the best thing you've written. I was going to mojo you to say "that's saying a lot," but apparently I can't. So. That's saying a lot.I took care of it for you :)

innerSpaceman
08-02-2007, 05:17 PM
OMG, that was good. Um, except I think you had the worst Harry Potter Midnight experience in the U.S.


But, hey, as long as better writing came of it than J.K. Rowling can ever dream of, I suppose it was worth it.

MouseWife
08-02-2007, 06:20 PM
OMG, that was good. Um, except I think you had the worst Harry Potter Midnight experience in the U.S.




No, I think Elena did. :(

Sadly, I don't think she even knows.

katiesue
08-02-2007, 07:04 PM
Awesome. Very moving.

And at least you weren't there wearing a flowery swim cap all night.

Strangler Lewis
08-02-2007, 07:38 PM
OMG, that was good. Um, except I think you had the worst Harry Potter Midnight experience in the U.S.


I nearly got egged by a passing car at mine, and there was a lot of heckling from the Friday night drunks, e.g., "you fushing losers (stumble) are wasting your lives."

GC: Nice story. Poor kid.

Babette
08-02-2007, 10:34 PM
Such a sad story. Your words put me there with you, and tears in my eyes for Elena. You get a gold star GC!

Snowflake
08-03-2007, 07:24 AM
Wow, GC, just wow. Beautifully written, please write more!

DreadPirateRoberts
08-03-2007, 07:40 AM
To me, there’s a lot of fun in people watching. As long as your gaze never turns deeply into judgment of the subject, it can be very rewarding.

:snap:

Gemini Cricket
08-03-2007, 01:18 PM
My thinking was that the story did have a happy ending. Elena really did act like she was rebelling for the very first time in her life. Her mom's reaction indicated to me that this was new to mom as well. I saw hope.

DPR - Did you see the irony in that line? Because I judged just about everyone I saw that night. Including me. :D

I was telling LSPE that I simply had to write this one out because little Elena was in my head since the release day. Couldn't get her face out of my brain.

I appreciate the comments. Ultimately, I think it's a happy story. I'm hopeful for lil Elena.
:)

AllyOops!
08-03-2007, 02:05 PM
GC- you are, in a word, amazing. I read your post outloud, tears brimming in my eyes. You painted such a vivid portrait. The imagery of Elena dances around my mind in a kind of familiar way.

I was an extremely shy & overweight child who always felt awkward. Especially when I couldn't fit into clothes meant for my age group. It was incredibly painful for me. So much so that when my height hit 5"3, I let my weight dwindle down to 72 pounds. To this day, I never thought that I was too thin at that point. Sometimes, I look into the mirror and often find that little round girl looking back at me. You'll never, ever hear me say the "f" word (the one that ends in "at") when it comes to somebody. I despise that word. I'll always look at a person and focus on their beauty. Beauty comes in all shapes and sizes. I never want to feel the way that I did when I was a little girl, but sometimes I do. I never talk about it, and it's hard to right now. I have no, and I mean NO, tolerance for those that tease people about their weight.

Good golly, I'm glad I have my own office because I have tears brimming again. Why are some people so mean?

At that age, you're far too young to realize that those that mock and laugh are just insecure and immature. Not too mention cruel. Instead, your cheeks burn, your heart and stomach sink like tortured anchors and you cry until your eyes sting.

I ♥ Elena. I've never wanted to hug somebody so much as I do her right at this moment.

Gemini Cricket
08-03-2007, 02:11 PM
Ally - :blush: Your post means a great deal to me. Thank you for sharing that with us.

I can't mojo you now. I owe you. :)

AllyOops!
08-03-2007, 02:20 PM
Ally - :blush: Your post means a great deal to me. Thank you for sharing that with us.

I can't mojo you now. I owe you. :)

:blush: Thank you so much! Your post meant a great deal to me! Thank you for giving me the opportunity to open up- something I'm not always good at doing.

DreadPirateRoberts
08-03-2007, 02:22 PM
DPR - Did you see the irony in that line? Because I judged just about everyone I saw that night. Including me. :D

I'm sorry to say I did not. I just read the line and thought "what an interesting idea", I never seem to think of things like that. I'm more of a consumer of ideas than a generator, that's why I find LoT so interesting. :)

MouseWife
08-04-2007, 10:27 AM
GC- I was an extremely shy & overweight child who always felt awkward. Especially when I couldn't fit into clothes meant for my age group... You'll never, ever hear me say the "f" word (the one that ends in "at") when it comes to somebody. I despise that word. I'll always look at a person and focus on their beauty. Beauty comes in all shapes and sizes. I never want to feel the way that I did when I was a little girl, but sometimes I do. I never talk about it, and it's hard to right now. I have no, and I mean NO, tolerance for those that tease people about their weight.

I ♥ Elena. I've never wanted to hug somebody so much as I do her right at this moment.


Okay, first off, I got that happy ending part~that she had strength in standing up to her mom, that does give home, etc. But, my comment was because I thought of all of the other crap she must have to deal with from her all of the time, all of her life.

Ally~ Wow, are you me or what? When I read the description of Elena, I remembered back to when I was a kid. I think my mom was pretty tired by the time I came around {refer to that 17 kid thread}. So much. But, I also was overweight and my sisters skinny and they called her spaghetti and, well, I wasn't.

Your comments about being overweight and not judging, I see a lot of people who are pretty big and I really, truly, look over that. I do look in and see their qualities. Unfortunately, I think the number of people who do this are few. It is sad.

GC, you are a gifted writer. What the heck is it you do?