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LSPoorEeyorick
02-26-2008, 02:55 PM
Today it seems that I
Hide among your words
Repeating them like an echo
Without the meaning or the feeling.

I am swelling
Without expelling
My breath.

I suck it in, hold it.
Wait for the footfall of inevitability.
Let it get close to me, brush my failing skin
Before I run.
Snowflake
02-26-2008, 03:02 PM
visible mojo for you LSPE since I can't do it the usual way.

Bravo!
katiesue
02-26-2008, 03:22 PM
Excellent!
Capt Jack
02-26-2008, 03:27 PM
:snap:
BDBopper
02-26-2008, 03:31 PM
:snap: :snap: :snap:
Ghoulish Delight
02-26-2008, 03:50 PM
:snap:
Sohrshah
02-26-2008, 04:48 PM
Wow... that's so.. pertinent right now.

Brava!
Gemini Cricket
02-26-2008, 11:27 PM
Awesome!
:)
Bornieo: Fully Loaded
02-27-2008, 12:35 AM
:snap:
CoasterMatt
02-27-2008, 12:45 AM
Amazing... you are truly gifted. :snap:
Cadaverous Pallor
02-27-2008, 08:44 AM
Awesomeness! I love this style. It says so much with so few words. :snap:


ETA - Ack! Don't have time to read your other piece! I swear I'll get to it later today.
mousepod
02-27-2008, 09:27 AM
I love this piece.

Except the first time I read it, I read "football of inevitability," and it gave me an entirely different image...
Cadaverous Pallor
02-27-2008, 03:02 PM
I love this piece.

Except the first time I read it, I read "football of inevitability," and it gave me an entirely different image...With apologies to LSPE:

Today it seems that I
Hide among your hut-hut-hikes
Repeating them like an echo
Without the meaning or the feeling.

I am sprinting
Without catching
My breath.

I suck it up, hold it.
Wait for the football of inevitability.
Let it get close to me, fall in my failing hands
Before I run.