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Originally Posted by Prudence
I loved it. My only comment would be that I want more sounds. And I don't know where exactly, or how, because I re-read it and there were sounds described. I guess when I picture Main Street in my mind -- and that in particular of all of the lands -- I don't just see it, I hear it.
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It's funny you should mention this. My original attempt included this, regarding Main Street:
Sweet music saunters through the air, familiar and comforting. I went through many versions of that thought and then decided to sit at Coke Corner with Rod playing....and realized that I didn't want to pick a song, because I wanted the mood to stay quiet and soothing. The bit I did put in about the music was my compromise between my urge to place him as a Rod fan but keep the tone low.
Thanks for the comment!