Ok, my lovely friends, now that I'm feeling more grounded, I have to ask...
I do kind of want to post this on facebook though I think I will edit quite a bit.  Take out a lot of the crying at least.  

  I'd like some constructive criticism.  It seems rambling and jumbled to me, but has a strong point, and I'd like to refine it.  Even if I decide not to post it, I like it as a piece on its own.