Enjoyable. Wonderful dialogue. I'm interested to see what would happen if you revisit some of the "action" or movment of the characters. "...reached out..." seems to stand out.
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His hand reached out to cup the back of her left leg, his thumb lightly caressing a deep bruise below her knee cap. He pressed down hard. Her eyes squinted in pain but remained dry. She asked him to kiss her.
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And not to be picky, but there's much use of Him, he, her in this area.
Just my humble opinion. Moving on...