Beware the twenty-sixth

LSPoorEeyorick · 04-17-2006, 08:53 PM

To simply one's essence

To combine a multifaceted experience
into a single statement of desire
is impossible
and inescapable from time to time

Communications expert
looking for a position that
will utilize her talent
for turn of phrase

Handsome gentleman
seeks a discreet encounter

Couple moving into the city
in need of loving home
for their golden retrievers

If we are expected to
slice the words
off ourselves
where stands the sin
of omission?

Communications expert
looking for a position that
will utilize her talent
for turn of phrase
(on her favorite
internet website
on company time)

Handsome gentleman
seeks (respite from
distracted wife and
mother of two
who hasn't
sucked him
in ages, via)
a discreet encounter
(in your ass.
Don't expect flowers.)

Couple (of addicts)
moving (away from our parole officers)
into the city (across the border)
in need of (a couple of gullible souls who will
let them into their)
loving home for (a casing of)
their (electronics and)
golden (jewelry
so that they may) retrieve
(it later that night before
splitting the country.
Sucke)rs.

Perhaps it would be better
not to demand that we
dumb ourselves down
in twenty-five words
or less

CoasterMatt · 04-17-2006, 09:35 PM

Great stuff

tracilicious · 04-17-2006, 10:02 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by LSPoorEeyorick

If we are expected to
slice the words
off ourselves
where stands the sin
of omission?

This is one of my favorite bits of imagery ever. I'd love to slice the words off myself.

Cadaverous Pallor · 04-18-2006, 12:02 PM

Awesome concept, perfect execution, with lots of hoops to jump through. Very impressed.

Gemini Cricket · 04-18-2006, 12:19 PM

Nicely done. It made me laugh. Good show!

Eliza Hodgkins 1812 · 04-18-2006, 03:07 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by tracilicious

This is one of my favorite bits of imagery ever. I'd love to slice the words off myself.

Mine, too. Mine, too. Love this, H. Well worth multiple reads! I think you should submit this to...someplace. I don't know where. McSweeny's? The New Yorker? I have no idea where one submits poetry, but you should.

lizziebith · 04-19-2006, 10:33 AM

This is utterly clever and enjoyable -- yes, submit it for publication, you should!

Snowflake · 04-19-2006, 11:54 AM

See, you NEEDED to quit your job. This kind of wordplay and turn of phrase needs to take the air and fly! Absolutely fabulous! If I could, I'd mojo you for this. Since I can't,

Boss Radio · 04-25-2006, 12:09 AM

You have indeed snatched the pebble.
It was time to go.

Well done.

blueerica · 04-25-2006, 12:41 AM

I dig it more and more each time I read it.

04-17-2006, 08:53 PM	#1
LSPoorEeyorick scribblin' Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: in the moment Posts: 3,872	Beware the twenty-sixth To simply one's essence To combine a multifaceted experience into a single statement of desire is impossible and inescapable from time to time Communications expert looking for a position that will utilize her talent for turn of phrase Handsome gentleman seeks a discreet encounter Couple moving into the city in need of loving home for their golden retrievers If we are expected to slice the words off ourselves where stands the sin of omission? Communications expert looking for a position that will utilize her talent for turn of phrase (on her favorite internet website on company time) Handsome gentleman seeks (respite from distracted wife and mother of two who hasn't sucked him in ages, via) a discreet encounter (in your ass. Don't expect flowers.) Couple (of addicts) moving (away from our parole officers) into the city (across the border) in need of (a couple of gullible souls who will let them into their) loving home for (a casing of) their (electronics and) golden (jewelry so that they may) retrieve (it later that night before splitting the country. Sucke)rs. Perhaps it would be better not to demand that we dumb ourselves down in twenty-five words or less
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CoasterMatt BRAAAAAAAINS! Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: One Step Beyond... Posts: 8,802	Great stuff __________________ Do you like my photography? Visit photosbymatt.tumblr.com to purchase prints!
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Cadaverous Pallor ohhhh baby Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Parental Bliss Posts: 12,364	Awesome concept, perfect execution, with lots of hoops to jump through. Very impressed. __________________ The second star to the right shines in the night for you
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Gemini Cricket ... Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 13,244	Nicely done. It made me laugh. Good show!
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lizziebith Wishing these titles could be longe Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Pearblossom CA Posts: 984	This is utterly clever and enjoyable -- yes, submit it for publication, you should! __________________ $ DO \|\| !$ DO ; TRY TRY: COMMAND NOT FOUND
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Snowflake lost in the fog Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: San Francisco Posts: 7,831	See, you NEEDED to quit your job. This kind of wordplay and turn of phrase needs to take the air and fly! Absolutely fabulous! If I could, I'd mojo you for this. Since I can't,
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04-25-2006, 12:09 AM	#9
Boss Radio The Littlest Hobo Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Hobo Junction Posts: 393	You have indeed snatched the pebble. It was time to go. Well done.
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04-25-2006, 12:41 AM	#10
blueerica Nueve Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 6,497	I dig it more and more each time I read it. __________________ Tomorrow is the day for you and me
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