Need your creative help!!

Nephythys · 04-07-2005, 02:38 PM

As some people know I am part of a group that will be singing at the Colorado Renaissance Festival.

There is a song in our sets called "heiland laddie" and we need to come up with some more verses- so here is where you come in-

Here are a couple of examples:

Quote:

Were you ever in Quebec
Stowin' timber on the deck?
where ye'd break yer bleedin' neck
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

Were you ever off the Horn
Where it's always fine and warm?
Where's there's a lion and a unicorn
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

So it names a place, and then goes from there.....

Think renn faire, drinking, wenchs and knights, kings and dragons, bawdy and lusty and lots of fun.

Can you help me? Even just some ideas- I can help with the cadence of the verse once it gets going!

please please please????????

sleepyjeff · 04-07-2005, 02:46 PM

Sounds like a Gordon Lightfoot song

LSPoorEeyorick · 04-07-2005, 03:15 PM

Always one to respond to a poetry challenge. You may only want to use some of these...

were you ever in st. ives
where a bonny laddy strives
to save gentle maidens' lives

were you ever in brisbane
building castles in the rain
like a carpenter done 'can'

were you ever in county-clare
sewing seeds 'round everywhere
in the clear delicious air

were you ever in burbank
in a day job at think tank
as your dreams just up and sank?

were you ever in irvine
thinking money's mighty fine
taking pills and drinking wine

Cadaverous Pallor · 04-07-2005, 03:22 PM

Hmmm.

What's stifling me here is the question of what kind of locales you'd use. I'm worried my country names would be too modern...hmm. Is "off the Horn" a specific place or a general location, like a meadow or a bay?

If I get something wrong here, please say so.

Were you ever out in Spain
Where the men are rather vain
And the ladies cry, "Again!"
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

Were you ever in Paris (pronounced Par-ee)
Picking fruit right from the tree?
Where all is pleasant and carefree
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

Perhaps more later, after criticism

Edit: Just saw LSPE's offerings, very nice. I like the modern ones too, heh.

Nephythys · 04-07-2005, 03:31 PM

DAMN I LOVE YOU GUYS!!!!!

arguhhh!!! As many as you can provide- those are awesome!!!!!

(we can diddle with words to make them period- the ideas are great to work with!!)

Place names- pretty free reign there. Doesn't have to be specific only to the 1500's.

Keeping in line with sailing songs, drinking songs, fantasy, Camelot (we have a Camelot verse too:
Were you ever in Camelot
Where the girls give all they've got
Because they're tired of Lancelot
Bonnie Heilnd Laddie!)

Thanks- more than I can say!

If I could mojo you right now CP- I so would!

Eliza Hodgkins 1812 · 04-07-2005, 04:05 PM

Were you ever in Manhattan
Where the ladies in fur and satin
Look bored and wait for love to happen
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

Were you ever in Hawaii
Where they dine on poi and Mahi-Mahi,
Do the hula and surf in a tsunami
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

Were you ever stopped in Wales
Where the mighty Grey King pales
And the Once and Future King sets sail
Bonnie Heiland Laddie

Were you ever in Old Scotland
Where in Jane’s embrace, fair Tam-Lin pinned
Had forced the Fairy Queen to rescind
Bonnie Heiland Laddie

Nephythys · 04-07-2005, 04:07 PM

LSPE- I have been playing with your offerings- what do you think:

Were you ever in St. Ives
where a handsome knight does strive
to save gentle maidens' lives
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

Were you ever in Brisbane
building castles in the rain
a pence a day ain’t worth the pain
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

Nephythys · 04-07-2005, 04:09 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Eliza Hodgkins 1812

Were you ever in Manhattan
Where the ladies in fur and satin
Look bored and wait for love to happen
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

Were you ever in Hawaii
Where they dine on poi and Mahi-Mahi,
Do the hula and surf in a tsunami
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

Were you ever stopped in Wales
Where the mighty Grey King pales
And the Once and Future King sets sail
Bonnie Heiland Laddie

Were you ever in Old Scotland
Where in Jane’s embrace, fair Tam-Lin pinned
Had forced the Fairy Queen to rescind
Bonnie Heiland Laddie

Thanks- more I can work with!

I KNEW you guys were up to this challenge. My group will love these!

Another muse- a member of our group did this one. same rythym and cadence- different type of verse-

Quote:

When he turns up, he'll get quite a row
Me no good scoundrel of a husband, Joe
Took to sea a year ago
Bonny Heiland Laddy

and for further inspiration:

Quote:

And what of that narsty dragon?
Who did appear when ye were braggin'
and drinking deep from yer flaggon!
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

Eliza Hodgkins 1812 · 04-07-2005, 04:23 PM

For what's the purpose of rum and gin
But to capture the fancy of a maiden's sin
And erase, with kisses,the night's chagrin
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

My lover took to sea in a bonny boat
"The fastest on water", his mates did boast
"But she sank like a stone," the papers wrote
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

She made me a card out of seashells
From the sands where my timber boat fells,
And I kiss it goodnight, but I'm missing her smells
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

mousepod · 04-07-2005, 04:27 PM

When you crossed the Khyber Pass -
Did you come across a lass
Who took great pride in her big eyes?
Bonnie Heiland Laddie!

(sorry Neph, I was channeling Benny Hill for a second)

04-07-2005, 02:46 PM	#2
sleepyjeff Go Hawks Go! Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Parkrose Posts: 2,632	Sounds like a Gordon Lightfoot song
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04-07-2005, 03:15 PM	#3
LSPoorEeyorick scribblin' Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: in the moment Posts: 3,872	Always one to respond to a poetry challenge. You may only want to use some of these... were you ever in st. ives where a bonny laddy strives to save gentle maidens' lives were you ever in brisbane building castles in the rain like a carpenter done 'can' were you ever in county-clare sewing seeds 'round everywhere in the clear delicious air were you ever in burbank in a day job at think tank as your dreams just up and sank? were you ever in irvine thinking money's mighty fine taking pills and drinking wine
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04-07-2005, 03:22 PM	#4
Cadaverous Pallor ohhhh baby Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Parental Bliss Posts: 12,364	Hmmm. What's stifling me here is the question of what kind of locales you'd use. I'm worried my country names would be too modern...hmm. Is "off the Horn" a specific place or a general location, like a meadow or a bay? If I get something wrong here, please say so. Were you ever out in Spain Where the men are rather vain And the ladies cry, "Again!" Bonnie Heiland Laddie! Were you ever in Paris (pronounced Par-ee) Picking fruit right from the tree? Where all is pleasant and carefree Bonnie Heiland Laddie! Perhaps more later, after criticism Edit: Just saw LSPE's offerings, very nice. I like the modern ones too, heh. __________________ The second star to the right shines in the night for you
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04-07-2005, 03:31 PM	#5
Nephythys Yeah, that's about it- Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: In a state of constant crap to get done Posts: 2,688	DAMN I LOVE YOU GUYS!!!!! arguhhh!!! As many as you can provide- those are awesome!!!!! (we can diddle with words to make them period- the ideas are great to work with!!) Place names- pretty free reign there. Doesn't have to be specific only to the 1500's. Keeping in line with sailing songs, drinking songs, fantasy, Camelot (we have a Camelot verse too: Were you ever in Camelot Where the girls give all they've got Because they're tired of Lancelot Bonnie Heilnd Laddie!) Thanks- more than I can say! If I could mojo you right now CP- I so would!
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04-07-2005, 04:05 PM	#6
Eliza Hodgkins 1812 Sputnik Sweetheart Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Long Beach Posts: 2,685	Were you ever in Manhattan Where the ladies in fur and satin Look bored and wait for love to happen Bonnie Heiland Laddie! Were you ever in Hawaii Where they dine on poi and Mahi-Mahi, Do the hula and surf in a tsunami Bonnie Heiland Laddie! Were you ever stopped in Wales Where the mighty Grey King pales And the Once and Future King sets sail Bonnie Heiland Laddie Were you ever in Old Scotland Where in Jane’s embrace, fair Tam-Lin pinned Had forced the Fairy Queen to rescind Bonnie Heiland Laddie
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04-07-2005, 04:07 PM	#7
Nephythys Yeah, that's about it- Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: In a state of constant crap to get done Posts: 2,688	LSPE- I have been playing with your offerings- what do you think: Were you ever in St. Ives where a handsome knight does strive to save gentle maidens' lives Bonnie Heiland Laddie! Were you ever in Brisbane building castles in the rain a pence a day ain’t worth the pain Bonnie Heiland Laddie!
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04-07-2005, 04:23 PM	#9
Eliza Hodgkins 1812 Sputnik Sweetheart Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Long Beach Posts: 2,685	For what's the purpose of rum and gin But to capture the fancy of a maiden's sin And erase, with kisses,the night's chagrin Bonnie Heiland Laddie! My lover took to sea in a bonny boat "The fastest on water", his mates did boast "But she sank like a stone," the papers wrote Bonnie Heiland Laddie! She made me a card out of seashells From the sands where my timber boat fells, And I kiss it goodnight, but I'm missing her smells Bonnie Heiland Laddie!
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04-07-2005, 04:27 PM	#10
mousepod You broke your Ramadar! Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 4,635	When you crossed the Khyber Pass - Did you come across a lass Who took great pride in her big eyes? Bonnie Heiland Laddie! (sorry Neph, I was channeling Benny Hill for a second) __________________ "Give the public everything you can give them, keep the place as clean as you can keep it, keep it friendly" - Walt Disney
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