In Sante Fe

[Cadaverous Pallor]

Sorry I didn't get to this earlier!

Very, very nice. The multiple cuts to "future" Max can be a bit confusing, but when viewed as a screenplay, it works rather well. Max's point of view is well stated, characters are well defined. Solid.

He’s standing by his father, who's face we can’t see, and is always looking down, hands in his pockets- shifting around alot.

Minor nitpick - it's a bit confusing as to who is "always looking down" etc., Max or his father.

So this is a story that was to appear in an "anthology" title.

An anthology of your own? Do you have more to share? We'd love to see it!