It's been months since I've worked on my own writing.

[Bornieo: Fully Loaded]

Enjoyable. Wonderful dialogue. I'm interested to see what would happen if you revisit some of the "action" or movment of the characters. "...reached out..." seems to stand out.

His hand reached out to cup the back of her left leg, his thumb lightly caressing a deep bruise below her knee cap. He pressed down hard. Her eyes squinted in pain but remained dry. She asked him to kiss her.

And not to be picky, but there's much use of Him, he, her in this area.

Just my humble opinion. Moving on...