Dove Contest - Take 1 (Need Feedback ASAP!!)

MouseWife · 01-03-2008, 08:22 PM

I can't hear the music or any words spoken but...

I agree with the Take 2 mirror being too foggy.

I think that perhaps the user {hey CP!! Great job!} shouldn't smile at the bottle at all. Either a look of 'I wonder how this works?' or 'why did I even bother with the bar soap???'

NMs {I hope I have that right} suggested describing the product a bit; that would be good {like i said, I haven't listened to it, perhaps you are?} and maybe, which I read, your comments about how you felt using it, somehow thrown in? Those adjectives. How you felt silky? That makes ME want to try it!!!

Just some comments, 'cuz you asked. Otherwise, I love it.

I feel for you and your voice. I was saying those words and my sinus problems make me sound probably like you.

I wish you the best in this contest!! You are awesome!!

01-03-2008, 08:22 PM	#11
MouseWife Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Da' Beach Posts: 2,957	I can't hear the music or any words spoken but... I agree with the Take 2 mirror being too foggy. I think that perhaps the user {hey CP!! Great job!} shouldn't smile at the bottle at all. Either a look of 'I wonder how this works?' or 'why did I even bother with the bar soap???' NMs {I hope I have that right} suggested describing the product a bit; that would be good {like i said, I haven't listened to it, perhaps you are?} and maybe, which I read, your comments about how you felt using it, somehow thrown in? Those adjectives. How you felt silky? That makes ME want to try it!!! Just some comments, 'cuz you asked. Otherwise, I love it. I feel for you and your voice. I was saying those words and my sinus problems make me sound probably like you. I wish you the best in this contest!! You are awesome!! __________________ Summa' time....when the livins' easy.........
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