Dove Contest - Take 1 (Need Feedback ASAP!!)

[Motorboat Cruiser]

Originally Posted by Disneyphile

OMG. Wilford Brimley would be too damned funny. This totally seductive shower scene and then Wilford's voice coming in at the end. Bwahahaha!!

Too bad someone doesn't have Gilbert Godfrey's phone number.

[Morrigoon]

Honestly? Submit all 3. I like them all for various reasons. Although I agree, take those extra "sucking" frames out of take 3 first. Maybe give the extra moments to your initial titles.

[Motorboat Cruiser]

Just my opinion but I think the "other" music clip works better for the piece than mine. Now, I'll go back and actually pay attention to the images.

[Alex]

One little thing I like about Take 3 that is different from the first two.

At the end, with the text:

Enjoy a little luxury, everyday

<<Dove bottle>>

dovecreamoil.com



Your titles are exactly aligned and over the "Dove" label on the body wash bottle. I'm reading the text of the first line and it blends to the bottle and immediately, with no eye movement at all I'm reading the brand name, and then without eye movement I am reading the action prompt (dovecreamoil.com).

In the other takes they are close but not really aligned.

[Kevy Baby]

Originally Posted by Alex

Your titles are exactly aligned and over the "Dove" label on the body wash bottle.

Wow: good catch Alex!

[BarTopDancer]

I keep getting distracted by the movement in the mirror in the final shot.

[MouseWife]

I can't hear the music or any words spoken but...

I agree with the Take 2 mirror being too foggy.

I think that perhaps the user {hey CP!! Great job!} shouldn't smile at the bottle at all. Either a look of 'I wonder how this works?' or 'why did I even bother with the bar soap???'

NMs {I hope I have that right} suggested describing the product a bit; that would be good {like i said, I haven't listened to it, perhaps you are?} and maybe, which I read, your comments about how you felt using it, somehow thrown in? Those adjectives. How you felt silky? That makes ME want to try it!!!

Just some comments, 'cuz you asked. Otherwise, I love it.

I feel for you and your voice. I was saying those words and my sinus problems make me sound probably like you.

I wish you the best in this contest!! You are awesome!!

[alphabassettgrrl]

thank you for posting the non-quick-time links. I seem to be having some issues here.

I like all three. I like the piano, french sounding music. I like the fogged mirror but you can still see Jen. I didn't find the motion distracting. I would prefer the bottle colors to match, though I realize you can't help that. I love the disgusted look at the soap drop! I like the shower squeak, too. Absolutely keep that.

[Disneyphile]

Alex, that was completely unintentional, so thanks for pointing that out!

I'm going to try and send that shot to Motion for some stablization and see if I can't take that stupid jolt out of there, because I think that's the shot to go with, simply because it lines up perfectly.

Ponine, if you have a microphone for your computer, I think Window's Media Player has a record feature.

As for music, I'm still checking out pieces. I think the European one sounds WAY too Italian. So, I very well might go with one of their stock clips. Although, I am getting a lot of positive feedback about MBC's clip in other places besides LoT.

[Not Afraid]

I still have to watch 3, but I love the foggy mirror. I think it gives us all a sense of a shower being had without the distraction of a naked body.

I don't like the music in Take 2. At all. I'm going to watch 3 now.