Help me edit this poem please - Lounge of Tomorrow

02-12-2008, 09:49 AM	#12
3894 Next Stop: Funkytown! Join Date: Dec 2006 Location: Cheeselandia Posts: 1,907	How do you feel about making the verb in the first stanza active? The clang of metal spoons against plastic trays filled with pureed pot pies muted the musty smell in the hallway of bleach and spongebaths and adult diapers. __________________ "I didn't want to have to do this, but you leave me no choice. Here comes the smolder." - Flynn Rider, "Tangled"
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