Inspiration 6.66 - Page 2

CoasterMatt · 10-23-2007, 08:31 PM

Just don't start singing "DROP THE LAUNDRY!"

Motorboat Cruiser · 10-23-2007, 11:03 PM

Ooh, I have a hankering to write something scary.

Great picture!

lashbear · 10-23-2007, 11:13 PM

POST IT GC. Please.

...I'm going crazy here. I can cope. I watched Saw 1,2 & 3.

Cadaverous Pallor · 10-24-2007, 10:52 AM

GC, you MUST post it.

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Silver House

Camera shows a frightening house, silver in the moonlight. We hear the wind blow through the trees as the clouds move ominously.

After a moment, we hear an approaching motor, then tires on dirt and gravel driveway. The motor quits and we hear two car doors open. The man sounds gruff and cut-to-the-chase, while the woman has a sweet, detailed trill. Voices come from offscreen – our view does not change, though the wind continues to blow and the clouds keep shifting.

Man: (impressed) Wow.

Woman: Yes, this is it.

Man: Looks bigger in person.

(crunching gravel and slam of doors)

Woman: That’s due to the high first story. See how the door ends and there’s more wall above it before the next story begins? There was a very tall foyer in there, perfect for a large chandelier.

Man: Right.

Woman: So, let’s see…(soft paper shuffle)…sorry about the notes, but I want to get this right…ok. A successful attorney commissioned it in 1922 for a single family and he paid for all the best in modern conveniences. The plumbing and wiring have held up extremely well. Neighbors are far off due to large property, house is well insulated.

Man: Mm-hm.

Woman: The attorney had three children, two daughters and a son, whom he murdered and buried in the backyard one particularly hot summer evening. Seems he had crushed their skulls with various household objects. Said he had “had enough.”

Man: Yes, I heard about that.

Woman: I am required to tell you that the corpses were eventually exhumed and given proper burials when the attorney was arrested.

Man: Oh, I thought they were still here.

Woman: No, no, that’s why they require us to say these things.

Man: Ok, well, go on.

Woman: All right then….(page flip) The next owners remodeled it into a duplex about 15 years later. They paid a landlady to live on the first floor and rented out the second. Changes included adding exterior stairs, which you can see here, as well as a cozy upstairs kitchen, locks on doors, walls to divide up rooms – everything you’d expect.

Man: How about a second bathroom?

Woman: No, they shared the bathroom, which the owners had forgotten to add locks to, and apparently that’s how the landlady snuck in and smothered her tenants with their own pillows.

Man: Ah, chink in the armor.

Woman: Right. Took the owners 4 separate renters to figure out what was going on, and by that time a renter had been able to defend himself.

Man: Must’ve been a mess.

Woman: Sure, the report said it was classic, vases smashed on heads, a metal comb used as a weapon…the house stood empty for quite a time afterwards. At least, officially. (gravel crunching) See this garden? Good soil, still, and the stone is steady.

Man: More like an ex-garden.

Woman: Well, yes, it’s been quite a while, but this stone garden partition was cared for by a homeless woman during the 50’s. She didn’t actually live in the house, for whatever reason, but she was spotted here quite often, transplanting, adding seeds, weeding, up to her elbows in dirt. Locals actually enjoyed it for a while.

Man: And…?

Woman: And, well, eventually she was caught defacating into it.

Man: Ahh.

Woman: Yes, she was arrested for it, and when tried, she said she was “sick of carrying it in from the restroom” and decided to just lift her skirt.

Man: Resourceful lady. She wasn’t hurting anyone.

Woman: They say the flowers grew quite well, when she was here….(gravel crunching)

Man: So, no one lived here for a while?

Woman: No, the state couldn’t get rid of it, at any price. The area deteriorated and even the far neighbors disappeared. By 1963 it was purchased by a nightclub owner and he converted it to a dance hall without worry of anyone complaining about noise.

Man: Really?

Woman: Yes, and by the time the Summer of Love rolled around, “Silver House”, as it was called, had plenty of reputation to get decent acts and large crowds. No, the Rolling Stones didn’t play here, but others did. Part of the second floor was torn out with the remainder converted to balcony over the large dance floor. Kitchens were converted to bars, windows painted over, funky lighting and projectors…

Man: For how long?

Woman: In 1974 someone sold large amounts of some extremely bad cocaine here. There were 5 deaths and 30 hospitalizations. Public outcry shut the place down.

Man: I should have guessed.

Woman: I am supposed to inform you that they never caught the guy.

Man: Well, he wasn’t a murderer so much as a greedy drug dealer.

Woman: Maybe. Anyway, it wasn’t until ’87 that someone bought it, and he rebuilt the second floor, installed a modern kitchen, put in lovely new hardwood floors. Just wait until you see…(crunching gravel)

Man: What happened to him?

Woman: (stops walking) What? Oh, he committed suicide. (more crunching)

Man: (firmly) How?

Woman: (stops again) How? Here’s the story. (steadliy) He smashed a window, one of the original, thick panes. They didn’t have safety glass in 1922. We don’t know how that happened, but what he did next was purposeful. He took a large piece of the glass and slit his wrists. Then he shoved the shard into his chest, between the ribs. The new locals say that he was so disappointed in himself for ruining an original window that he took his own life.

Man: Wow. Interesting. I did not expect that.

Woman: Indeed. (She jingles a keychain to break the tension.) The current owners have decided to sell as is, so it’s a bit of a fixer-upper. The floors are still gorgeous, as long as you put a rug over the red spot. Shall we go in?

Man: Actually, no need.

Man moves into view, finally. His steps are heavy, moving him completely into sight. The light is beginning to fade now, and we have no color, only a thick black silhouette to go by. His jacket flaps in the oncoming wind as he faces the house.

Man: I’ll take it.

Gemini Cricket · 10-24-2007, 10:58 AM

I love that, CP.

DreadPirateRoberts · 10-24-2007, 11:07 AM

Nice, CP, nice!

innerSpaceman · 10-24-2007, 12:21 PM

Heheh, good one, CP.

Morrigoon · 10-24-2007, 02:18 PM

Verrrry nice!

innerSpaceman · 10-24-2007, 02:33 PM

Ok, GC and MBC .... waiting ....

Eliza Hodgkins 1812 · 10-24-2007, 02:59 PM

I think I'm going to wait and read the submissions on Halloween. That'll be my way of celebrating the holiday at work.

10-23-2007, 08:31 PM	#1
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10-23-2007, 11:03 PM	#2
Motorboat Cruiser Cruiser of Motorboats Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: So Cal Posts: 3,665	Ooh, I have a hankering to write something scary. Great picture!
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10-23-2007, 11:13 PM	#3
lashbear SwishBuckling Bear Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: In Isolation :) Posts: 6,597	POST IT GC. Please. ...I'm going crazy here. I can cope. I watched Saw 1,2 & 3. __________________ *I Heart* my Husband - I can't think of anyone I'd rather be in isolation with.**
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10-24-2007, 10:52 AM	#4
Cadaverous Pallor ohhhh baby Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Parental Bliss Posts: 12,364	GC, you MUST post it. --- Silver House Camera shows a frightening house, silver in the moonlight. We hear the wind blow through the trees as the clouds move ominously. After a moment, we hear an approaching motor, then tires on dirt and gravel driveway. The motor quits and we hear two car doors open. The man sounds gruff and cut-to-the-chase, while the woman has a sweet, detailed trill. Voices come from offscreen – our view does not change, though the wind continues to blow and the clouds keep shifting. Man: (impressed) Wow. Woman: Yes, this is it. Man: Looks bigger in person. (crunching gravel and slam of doors) Woman: That’s due to the high first story. See how the door ends and there’s more wall above it before the next story begins? There was a very tall foyer in there, perfect for a large chandelier. Man: Right. Woman: So, let’s see…(soft paper shuffle)…sorry about the notes, but I want to get this right…ok. A successful attorney commissioned it in 1922 for a single family and he paid for all the best in modern conveniences. The plumbing and wiring have held up extremely well. Neighbors are far off due to large property, house is well insulated. Man: Mm-hm. Woman: The attorney had three children, two daughters and a son, whom he murdered and buried in the backyard one particularly hot summer evening. Seems he had crushed their skulls with various household objects. Said he had “had enough.” Man: Yes, I heard about that. Woman: I am required to tell you that the corpses were eventually exhumed and given proper burials when the attorney was arrested. Man: Oh, I thought they were still here. Woman: No, no, that’s why they require us to say these things. Man: Ok, well, go on. Woman: All right then….(page flip) The next owners remodeled it into a duplex about 15 years later. They paid a landlady to live on the first floor and rented out the second. Changes included adding exterior stairs, which you can see here, as well as a cozy upstairs kitchen, locks on doors, walls to divide up rooms – everything you’d expect. Man: How about a second bathroom? Woman: No, they shared the bathroom, which the owners had forgotten to add locks to, and apparently that’s how the landlady snuck in and smothered her tenants with their own pillows. Man: Ah, chink in the armor. Woman: Right. Took the owners 4 separate renters to figure out what was going on, and by that time a renter had been able to defend himself. Man: Must’ve been a mess. Woman: Sure, the report said it was classic, vases smashed on heads, a metal comb used as a weapon…the house stood empty for quite a time afterwards. At least, officially. (gravel crunching) See this garden? Good soil, still, and the stone is steady. Man: More like an ex-garden. Woman: Well, yes, it’s been quite a while, but this stone garden partition was cared for by a homeless woman during the 50’s. She didn’t actually live in the house, for whatever reason, but she was spotted here quite often, transplanting, adding seeds, weeding, up to her elbows in dirt. Locals actually enjoyed it for a while. Man: And…? Woman: And, well, eventually she was caught defacating into it. Man: Ahh. Woman: Yes, she was arrested for it, and when tried, she said she was “sick of carrying it in from the restroom” and decided to just lift her skirt. Man: Resourceful lady. She wasn’t hurting anyone. Woman: They say the flowers grew quite well, when she was here….(gravel crunching) Man: So, no one lived here for a while? Woman: No, the state couldn’t get rid of it, at any price. The area deteriorated and even the far neighbors disappeared. By 1963 it was purchased by a nightclub owner and he converted it to a dance hall without worry of anyone complaining about noise. Man: Really? Woman: Yes, and by the time the Summer of Love rolled around, “Silver House”, as it was called, had plenty of reputation to get decent acts and large crowds. No, the Rolling Stones didn’t play here, but others did. Part of the second floor was torn out with the remainder converted to balcony over the large dance floor. Kitchens were converted to bars, windows painted over, funky lighting and projectors… Man: For how long? Woman: In 1974 someone sold large amounts of some extremely bad cocaine here. There were 5 deaths and 30 hospitalizations. Public outcry shut the place down. Man: I should have guessed. Woman: I am supposed to inform you that they never caught the guy. Man: Well, he wasn’t a murderer so much as a greedy drug dealer. Woman: Maybe. Anyway, it wasn’t until ’87 that someone bought it, and he rebuilt the second floor, installed a modern kitchen, put in lovely new hardwood floors. Just wait until you see…(crunching gravel) Man: What happened to him? Woman: (stops walking) What? Oh, he committed suicide. (more crunching) Man: (firmly) How? Woman: (stops again) How? Here’s the story. (steadliy) He smashed a window, one of the original, thick panes. They didn’t have safety glass in 1922. We don’t know how that happened, but what he did next was purposeful. He took a large piece of the glass and slit his wrists. Then he shoved the shard into his chest, between the ribs. The new locals say that he was so disappointed in himself for ruining an original window that he took his own life. Man: Wow. Interesting. I did not expect that. Woman: Indeed. (She jingles a keychain to break the tension.) The current owners have decided to sell as is, so it’s a bit of a fixer-upper. The floors are still gorgeous, as long as you put a rug over the red spot. Shall we go in? Man: Actually, no need. Man moves into view, finally. His steps are heavy, moving him completely into sight. The light is beginning to fade now, and we have no color, only a thick black silhouette to go by. His jacket flaps in the oncoming wind as he faces the house. Man: I’ll take it. __________________ The second star to the right shines in the night for you
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10-24-2007, 10:58 AM	#5
Gemini Cricket ... Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 13,244	I love that, CP.
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DreadPirateRoberts Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2006 Posts: 2,483	Nice, CP, nice!
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10-24-2007, 12:21 PM	#7
innerSpaceman Kink of Swank Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Inner Space Posts: 13,075	Heheh, good one, CP.
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10-24-2007, 02:18 PM	#8
Morrigoon I throw stones at houses Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Location: Location Posts: 9,534	Verrrry nice! __________________ http://bash.org/?top "It is useless for sheep to pass a resolution in favor of vegetarianism while wolves remain of a different opinion." -- William Randolph Inge
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10-24-2007, 02:33 PM	#9
innerSpaceman Kink of Swank Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Inner Space Posts: 13,075	Ok, GC and MBC .... waiting ....
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10-24-2007, 02:59 PM	#10
Eliza Hodgkins 1812 Sputnik Sweetheart Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Long Beach Posts: 2,685	I think I'm going to wait and read the submissions on Halloween. That'll be my way of celebrating the holiday at work.
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