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Cadaverous Pallor 04-13-2006 10:18 PM

Soft soft soft
 
I covet innocence
faint soft loose
a dim corner I can slump into
excuse me

light stings
motion - sick
voice creaks with morning
disuse

leave me be
life will not
disappointments mound up
leavings not washed away
just dump it in the corner

the world goes on

nobody cares what you do
after a while
remember that guy you loved once
who abused himself and others until
no one could possibly care
in the end all cares are vulnerable

divulge, retract
encode, extract
dilate, contract
delineate, abstract

the darkness lures me back
plush and pillowed
wedged in
satin
can't
hear

what is there, in here?
all this blessed nothing
blessed blessed nothing
no thought deed retribution
no conflict thought attempt
no trial debate thought
no thought thought thought
blessed blessed nothing

Rot is soft

the world may forget you
the past may drop you
the friends may seperate
the site may vanish in a puff of broken links
the journal may get swept away



but your mind won't let you go

Snowflake 04-14-2006 03:24 AM

Quote:

You must spread some Mojo around before giving it to Cadaverous Pallor again.
:snap: :cheers:

Nice CP!
I was very taken with this bit

Quote:

the world may forget you
the past may drop you
the friends may seperate
the site may vanish in a puff of broken links
the journal may get swept away



but your mind won't let you go

DreadPirateRoberts 04-14-2006 08:32 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Cadaverous Pallor
divulge, retract
encode, extract
dilate, contract
delineate, abstract

I liked the rhythm of this part

Gemini Cricket 04-14-2006 09:07 AM

:snap: Good stuff, CP! Love it. :)

tracilicious 04-14-2006 01:46 PM

:snap:

Tramspotter 04-17-2006 03:31 PM

Maybe soft but has a hard edge to it! :snap:


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