Lounge of Tomorrow - Melancholy

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Morrigoon

04-25-2007 04:42 PM

Melancholy

My melancholy
Life, softly greyed like June gloom
Where July never comes

Snowflake

04-25-2007 04:43 PM

:snap:
loved it!

But sorry for the melancholy

flippyshark

04-25-2007 04:51 PM

Very nice. (And an interestingly modified haiku - with one extra beat.)

:snap:

Morrigoon

04-25-2007 05:36 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by flippyshark (Post 132925)

Very nice. (And an interestingly modified haiku - with one extra beat.)

:snap:

Crap! gotta fix that.

Morrigoon

04-25-2007 05:38 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Morrigoon (Post 132922)

My melancholy
Life, softly greyed like June gloom
Where July never comes

My melancholy
Life, softly greyed like June gloom
July never comes

^That's how I originally wanted to do it, but for some reason in my brain I gave July one syllable, so I had added in "where".

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