Help me edit this poem please

LSPoorEeyorick · 02-12-2008, 12:32 PM

I really like your poem, Traci - very much.

One question for you - are you suggesting another interpretation of nearsighted by separating the compound word? I thought about it for awhile and wondered if you were going for the concept of almost seeing (or almost seen) as opposed to nearsightedness, but then I found myself wondering if, by breaking up of the word would cause more of a break in fluidity than it would offer in expressiveness?

Still, that's a really minor question about a piece that I think is quite marvelous.

02-12-2008, 12:32 PM	#14
LSPoorEeyorick scribblin' Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: in the moment Posts: 3,872	I really like your poem, Traci - very much. One question for you - are you suggesting another interpretation of nearsighted by separating the compound word? I thought about it for awhile and wondered if you were going for the concept of almost seeing (or almost seen) as opposed to nearsightedness, but then I found myself wondering if, by breaking up of the word would cause more of a break in fluidity than it would offer in expressiveness? Still, that's a really minor question about a piece that I think is quite marvelous.
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