TV Show Teaser Sample

Disneyphile · 12-11-2007, 04:29 PM

Ok, here's the 90-second teaser that I recently cut for the show that I'm helping to pitch:

http://web.mac.com/tdsproductions/iW...s/Sample1.html

Honest feedback is most welcome and appreciated. My feelings will not be hurt - I use feedback to make things better, and there is always room for improvement.

Also, you will see the new animated logo at the very end of the teaser. I had to scrap the original "lens" logo, because it just didn't work well in print and wouldn't center. I like this new one, because it ends on a simple line, demanding attention, after it's initial "spark". To me, it seems a little easier on the eyes than the original concept. Feel free to comment on that too.

So, anyway, please watch, and let me know what you think. (Don't mind the rest of the website - I'm working on it right now.)

Capt Jack · 12-11-2007, 04:48 PM

already better than "Car Crazy" and half the other shows I watch regularly.

bravo. other than that I hope youre going to do a broader spectrum of "motorheads" than the elitest concourse/million $ car set though. theres already a show or two with those as their mainstay and to be frank...they tend to come off incredibly snobbish to the more pedestrian gearheads like myself

Disneyphile · 12-11-2007, 04:58 PM

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Originally Posted by Capt Jack

bravo. other than that I hope youre going to do a broader spectrum of "motorheads" than the elitest concourse/million $ car set though. theres already a show or two with those as their mainstay and to be frank...they tend to come off incredibly snobbish to the more pedestrian gearheads like myself

The show is covering quite a variety of aspects, mostly cars, but also other motor sports too, and everything from celebrity/expensive cars to the quintessential hotrod rebuild.

We have plans to cover a museum soon too. It's funny - the car show that's shown in the teaser had vehicles from $4,000 to $4MM. There's a lot of footage yet to be seen.

That reminds me - I need to check on that legal street race coming up this weekend in San Diego.

Disneyphile · 12-11-2007, 11:41 PM

36 views and only one comment.

Now, you all have me worried.

Kevy Baby · 12-11-2007, 11:48 PM

The video sucks

Actually, I have not viewed it yet, but I wanted to get a rise out of you

DreadPirateRoberts · 12-11-2007, 11:49 PM

Disneyphile · 12-12-2007, 12:05 AM

Woohoo!! So far, two snaps up and a circle!

(Mega kudos to anyone who gets that reference.

)

CoasterMatt · 12-12-2007, 12:09 AM

In Living Color?

I haven't been able to watch the clip yet- for some reason, I haven't been able to view it on my Linux beast; I'll fire up Windows or something and watch it in the morning.

Disneyphile · 12-12-2007, 12:10 AM

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Originally Posted by CoasterMatt

In Living Color?

Ding, ding! We have a winner!

Tom · 12-12-2007, 12:12 AM

Hey, nice job! LSPE and I have watched, but as she is stuck late at work, I have been designated to pass along a couple of suggestions we had - we hope they'll be helpful on your next creative round.

We don't really know what kind of footage you have available to you at this point, but I did find myself thinking it would be great if you could include some of the breadth of material that will be in the show. Maybe this is something that will have to be added in over time as you do more shoots, but we think it would be great to have in there.

Also, we wouldn't have minded seeing the concept of the show spelled out more specifically, even if it was just through titles or voiceover ("Each week, we will take viewers..." etc.), because the concept wasn't entirely clear to me from the promo. You explained here on LoT the extensive range of material you plan to cover, and that's potential that the investors will want to know about! In this vein, LSPE sent me something to include, so I will quote her here: "Something that helps me when I'm working on proposals (or anything involving writing/selling, really)... are these questions. What is it that you're selling? How is it different from what everyone else is selling? Why this, why now?"

On smaller points, the text at the beginning is a little hard for me to read. I think that having the text front and center instead of angled with the video might make it easier to absorb. (LSPE says "eye-pleasing!") And I would play up the title more. You want "Motorheads" to stick in their minds! Also, it might be nice to look for opportunities to speed up the cutting, reduce the length of the dissolves, and cut to music a bit more, just to spice it up a bit.

Anyway, that's just some stuff we thought of. Please use any or none, whatever suits you.

12-11-2007, 04:29 PM	#1
Disneyphile SQUIRREL! Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: On the curbside. Posts: 5,098	TV Show Teaser Sample Ok, here's the 90-second teaser that I recently cut for the show that I'm helping to pitch: http://web.mac.com/tdsproductions/iW...s/Sample1.html Honest feedback is most welcome and appreciated. My feelings will not be hurt - I use feedback to make things better, and there is always room for improvement. Also, you will see the new animated logo at the very end of the teaser. I had to scrap the original "lens" logo, because it just didn't work well in print and wouldn't center. I like this new one, because it ends on a simple line, demanding attention, after it's initial "spark". To me, it seems a little easier on the eyes than the original concept. Feel free to comment on that too. So, anyway, please watch, and let me know what you think. (Don't mind the rest of the website - I'm working on it right now.)
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12-11-2007, 04:48 PM	#2
Capt Jack check your head Join Date: Oct 2005 Posts: 4,174	already better than "Car Crazy" and half the other shows I watch regularly. bravo. other than that I hope youre going to do a broader spectrum of "motorheads" than the elitest concourse/million $ car set though. theres already a show or two with those as their mainstay and to be frank...they tend to come off incredibly snobbish to the more pedestrian gearheads like myself __________________ a clear conscience is a sure sign of a fuzzy memory
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12-12-2007, 12:12 AM	#10
Tom Valued member Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Los Angeles Posts: 541	Hey, nice job! LSPE and I have watched, but as she is stuck late at work, I have been designated to pass along a couple of suggestions we had - we hope they'll be helpful on your next creative round. We don't really know what kind of footage you have available to you at this point, but I did find myself thinking it would be great if you could include some of the breadth of material that will be in the show. Maybe this is something that will have to be added in over time as you do more shoots, but we think it would be great to have in there. Also, we wouldn't have minded seeing the concept of the show spelled out more specifically, even if it was just through titles or voiceover ("Each week, we will take viewers..." etc.), because the concept wasn't entirely clear to me from the promo. You explained here on LoT the extensive range of material you plan to cover, and that's potential that the investors will want to know about! In this vein, LSPE sent me something to include, so I will quote her here: "Something that helps me when I'm working on proposals (or anything involving writing/selling, really)... are these questions. What is it that you're selling? How is it different from what everyone else is selling? Why this, why now?" On smaller points, the text at the beginning is a little hard for me to read. I think that having the text front and center instead of angled with the video might make it easier to absorb. (LSPE says "eye-pleasing!") And I would play up the title more. You want "Motorheads" to stick in their minds! Also, it might be nice to look for opportunities to speed up the cutting, reduce the length of the dissolves, and cut to music a bit more, just to spice it up a bit. Anyway, that's just some stuff we thought of. Please use any or none, whatever suits you.
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