Dove Contest - Take 1 (Need Feedback ASAP!!)

Kevy Baby · 01-03-2008, 05:19 PM

I will start by saying T that this, overall, looks fantastic. We have all been focusing on improvements but I wanted to let you know that this looks so freakin' good in such a short period of time is amazing!

OK, some of the edits still seam abrupt to me. In particular: both sides of the soap drop, into the soap squeeze, and into the split screen. When trying to convey "soft", you need soft transitions as well. There may be too many scenes/transitions as well, but maybe if these transitions were softened it might help.

And, I disagree about the fogged mirror - I like it. It provides a little motion to an otherwise static screen. You are selling the product, not Jen. I think the fog is just about right. I don't know if there is a VO on the closing shot (I can't listen at work: only watch), but it looks ripe for one.

01-03-2008, 05:19 PM	#11
Kevy Baby Chowder Head Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Yes Posts: 18,500	I will start by saying T that this, overall, looks fantastic. We have all been focusing on improvements but I wanted to let you know that this looks so freakin' good in such a short period of time is amazing! OK, some of the edits still seam abrupt to me. In particular: both sides of the soap drop, into the soap squeeze, and into the split screen. When trying to convey "soft", you need soft transitions as well. There may be too many scenes/transitions as well, but maybe if these transitions were softened it might help. And, I disagree about the fogged mirror - I like it. It provides a little motion to an otherwise static screen. You are selling the product, not Jen. I think the fog is just about right. I don't know if there is a VO on the closing shot (I can't listen at work: only watch), but it looks ripe for one. __________________ The thing about quotes on the internet is that you cannot verify their validity. - Abraham Lincoln
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