Dove Contest - Take 1 (Need Feedback ASAP!!)

[Cadaverous Pallor]

ETA - looks like I'm in the minority on the fog thing but here's my opinion -


OMG - Take 3 ROCKS! Sooo much better. The only quibble I have now is since you cropped the beginning of the squeezing (awesome) you now have too long an ending on the shot. You can see the cream suck back into the bottle when I stopped squeezing, which I think looks bad.

Other than that, I'd add at least one line of voice over somewhere (I'd trust marketing people with decisions like that, but I think it does need some vocal in it), but that's it. The end shot is perfect, IMO. I dig what you're doing with the beginning being abrupt like the bar of soap.

Seriously, this is awesome.

Originally Posted by Pirate Bill

I'll be in my bunk.

You're not bringing your laptop with, are you??