Dove Contest - Take 1 (Need Feedback ASAP!!) - Page 9

Kevy Baby · 01-03-2008, 07:47 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Alex

Your titles are exactly aligned and over the "Dove" label on the body wash bottle.

Wow: good catch Alex!

Ponine · 01-03-2008, 08:03 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Disneyphile

Um, gals... I need help with this one - can any of you please record for me?

The line: "Enjoy a little luxury, everyday."

I can help of I had an idea of WHAT to record with...
If you already have one, go with it.

BarTopDancer · 01-03-2008, 08:05 PM

I keep getting distracted by the movement in the mirror in the final shot.

alphabassettgrrl · 01-03-2008, 08:16 PM

thank you for posting the non-quick-time links. I seem to be having some issues here.

I like all three.

I like the piano, french sounding music. I like the fogged mirror but you can still see Jen. I didn't find the motion distracting. I would prefer the bottle colors to match, though I realize you can't help that. I love the disgusted look at the soap drop! I like the shower squeak, too. Absolutely keep that.

MouseWife · 01-03-2008, 08:22 PM

I can't hear the music or any words spoken but...

I agree with the Take 2 mirror being too foggy.

I think that perhaps the user {hey CP!! Great job!} shouldn't smile at the bottle at all. Either a look of 'I wonder how this works?' or 'why did I even bother with the bar soap???'

NMs {I hope I have that right} suggested describing the product a bit; that would be good {like i said, I haven't listened to it, perhaps you are?} and maybe, which I read, your comments about how you felt using it, somehow thrown in? Those adjectives. How you felt silky? That makes ME want to try it!!!

Just some comments, 'cuz you asked. Otherwise, I love it.

I feel for you and your voice. I was saying those words and my sinus problems make me sound probably like you.

I wish you the best in this contest!! You are awesome!!

Disneyphile · 01-03-2008, 08:26 PM

Alex, that was completely unintentional, so thanks for pointing that out!

I'm going to try and send that shot to Motion for some stablization and see if I can't take that stupid jolt out of there, because I think that's the shot to go with, simply because it lines up perfectly.

Ponine, if you have a microphone for your computer, I think Window's Media Player has a record feature.

As for music, I'm still checking out pieces. I think the European one sounds WAY too Italian. So, I very well might go with one of their stock clips. Although, I am getting a lot of positive feedback about MBC's clip in other places besides LoT.

Not Afraid · 01-03-2008, 09:01 PM

I still have to watch 3, but I love the foggy mirror. I think it gives us all a sense of a shower being had without the distraction of a naked body.

I don't like the music in Take 2. At all. I'm going to watch 3 now.

Disneyphile · 01-03-2008, 09:29 PM

Ok, and my last take for the night (thank the gods): Take 4

(Click here for the alternate Google upload.)

This version fixes the bottle suckage, the shake in the shower/mirror scene, and includes one of Dove's stock music selections.

Damn, I'm tired, and my butt hurts.

Isaac · 01-03-2008, 09:30 PM

I kinda like the fourth one the most, but that's just me.

BarTopDancer · 01-03-2008, 09:47 PM

I really like the 4th one. I'd be curious to see how it is with the other 2 musical options (to be unique). Still distracted by the mirror.

Also, I noticed in the 3rd and 4th takes the 'Dove' on the bottle Jen is holding isn't prominent. Is there a way to spotlight it?

I'll see if I can get a few people at work take a look at it tomorrow.

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01-03-2008, 08:16 PM	#84
alphabassettgrrl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 4,978	thank you for posting the non-quick-time links. I seem to be having some issues here. I like all three. I like the piano, french sounding music. I like the fogged mirror but you can still see Jen. I didn't find the motion distracting. I would prefer the bottle colors to match, though I realize you can't help that. I love the disgusted look at the soap drop! I like the shower squeak, too. Absolutely keep that. __________________ Why cycling? Anything [sport] that had to do with a ball, I wasn't very good at. -Lance Armstrong
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01-03-2008, 08:22 PM	#85
MouseWife Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Da' Beach Posts: 2,957	I can't hear the music or any words spoken but... I agree with the Take 2 mirror being too foggy. I think that perhaps the user {hey CP!! Great job!} shouldn't smile at the bottle at all. Either a look of 'I wonder how this works?' or 'why did I even bother with the bar soap???' NMs {I hope I have that right} suggested describing the product a bit; that would be good {like i said, I haven't listened to it, perhaps you are?} and maybe, which I read, your comments about how you felt using it, somehow thrown in? Those adjectives. How you felt silky? That makes ME want to try it!!! Just some comments, 'cuz you asked. Otherwise, I love it. I feel for you and your voice. I was saying those words and my sinus problems make me sound probably like you. I wish you the best in this contest!! You are awesome!! __________________ Summa' time....when the livins' easy.........
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01-03-2008, 08:26 PM	#86
Disneyphile SQUIRREL! Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: On the curbside. Posts: 5,098	Alex, that was completely unintentional, so thanks for pointing that out! I'm going to try and send that shot to Motion for some stablization and see if I can't take that stupid jolt out of there, because I think that's the shot to go with, simply because it lines up perfectly. Ponine, if you have a microphone for your computer, I think Window's Media Player has a record feature. As for music, I'm still checking out pieces. I think the European one sounds WAY too Italian. So, I very well might go with one of their stock clips. Although, I am getting a lot of positive feedback about MBC's clip in other places besides LoT.
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01-03-2008, 09:01 PM	#87
Not Afraid HI! Join Date: Jan 2005 Posts: 17,108	I still have to watch 3, but I love the foggy mirror. I think it gives us all a sense of a shower being had without the distraction of a naked body. I don't like the music in Take 2. At all. I'm going to watch 3 now.
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01-03-2008, 09:29 PM	#88
Disneyphile SQUIRREL! Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: On the curbside. Posts: 5,098	Ok, and my last take for the night (thank the gods): Take 4 (Click here for the alternate Google upload.) This version fixes the bottle suckage, the shake in the shower/mirror scene, and includes one of Dove's stock music selections. Damn, I'm tired, and my butt hurts.
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01-03-2008, 09:30 PM	#89
Isaac the one n only Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Anaheim Posts: 1,236	I kinda like the fourth one the most, but that's just me. __________________
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01-03-2008, 09:47 PM	#90
BarTopDancer Prepping... Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Here, there, everywhere Posts: 11,405	I really like the 4th one. I'd be curious to see how it is with the other 2 musical options (to be unique). Still distracted by the mirror. Also, I noticed in the 3rd and 4th takes the 'Dove' on the bottle Jen is holding isn't prominent. Is there a way to spotlight it? I'll see if I can get a few people at work take a look at it tomorrow. __________________ Spork is the new MacGyver Postcards From My Edge
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