Dove Contest - Take 1 (Need Feedback ASAP!!)

[~MS~]

I liked the drop the ordinary better...it flowed with the visual a bit more....

[Deebs]

There are elements I like in both takes.

My personal preference, overall, is Take 1. That said, I think Take 2 is the better result for mass appeal.

I like the music in Take 1 better, but think the music in Take 2 is more appropriate.

The fogged mirror is much better, because as CP mentioned herself, I was kinda wondering what exactly she was washing in Take 1.

*Drop* is a much better word choice.

[Snowflake]

I liked take 2 and take 1. I was really taken with 2, however. Loved the fogged mirror. liked the music of 1, alot

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[Kevy Baby]

Originally Posted by Disneyphile

OMG. Wilford Brimley would be too damned funny. This totally seductive shower scene and then Wilford's voice coming in at the end. Bwahahaha!!

How about Don LaFontaine?

Originally Posted by Snowflake

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I, um, looked at the camera when it was being unloaded...

[Isaac]

Can you upload the clip in a different format like mpg ?

I don't want to upgrade my version of Quicktime cause I'll lose my pro key, but I would like to see the clips you've made.

[Kevy Baby]

I will start by saying T that this, overall, looks fantastic. We have all been focusing on improvements but I wanted to let you know that this looks so freakin' good in such a short period of time is amazing!

OK, some of the edits still seam abrupt to me. In particular: both sides of the soap drop, into the soap squeeze, and into the split screen. When trying to convey "soft", you need soft transitions as well. There may be too many scenes/transitions as well, but maybe if these transitions were softened it might help.

And, I disagree about the fogged mirror - I like it. It provides a little motion to an otherwise static screen. You are selling the product, not Jen. I think the fog is just about right. I don't know if there is a VO on the closing shot (I can't listen at work: only watch), but it looks ripe for one.

[Ghoulish Delight]

Originally Posted by Kevy Baby

And, I disagree about the fogged mirror - I like it. It provides a little motion to an otherwise static screen. You are selling the product, not Jen. I think the fog is just about right.

Like I said, I didn't dislike the fog effect, it was just over done to the point that I actually had to back up because I thought the entire mirror shot was gone. I could barely see anything. I liked the idea of obscuring, but you want it to be there enough to make the point.

[NirvanaMan]

Originally Posted by Ghoulish Delight

Like I said, I didn't dislike the fog effect, it was just over done to the point that I actually had to back up because I thought the entire mirror shot was gone. I could barely see anything. I liked the idea of obscuring, but you want it to be there enough to make the point.

I feel the same.

[Disneyphile]

Ok, here is Take 3.

And for those of you who are Quicktime-challenged, here are temporary links to private Google viewing (they're very pixilated this way though):

Take 1
Take 2
Take 3

[Cadaverous Pallor]

ETA - looks like I'm in the minority on the fog thing but here's my opinion -


OMG - Take 3 ROCKS! Sooo much better. The only quibble I have now is since you cropped the beginning of the squeezing (awesome) you now have too long an ending on the shot. You can see the cream suck back into the bottle when I stopped squeezing, which I think looks bad.

Other than that, I'd add at least one line of voice over somewhere (I'd trust marketing people with decisions like that, but I think it does need some vocal in it), but that's it. The end shot is perfect, IMO. I dig what you're doing with the beginning being abrupt like the bar of soap.

Seriously, this is awesome.

Originally Posted by Pirate Bill

I'll be in my bunk.

You're not bringing your laptop with, are you??