Dove Contest - Take 1 (Need Feedback ASAP!!) - Page 8

NirvanaMan · 01-03-2008, 07:07 PM

Or that old dude from the diabetes commercials that can't say diabetes.

BarTopDancer · 01-03-2008, 07:09 PM

The 3rd one is great! My two things are the product getting sucked back into the bottle and I am really distracted by the movement in the end. The level of fog isn't to much, or to little but the movement is to much.

If you guys don't mind I can show it to a few marketing peoples in my office tomorrow for a fresh perspective.

Morrigoon · 01-03-2008, 07:21 PM

Honestly? Submit all 3. I like them all for various reasons. Although I agree, take those extra "sucking" frames out of take 3 first. Maybe give the extra moments to your initial titles.

Disneyphile · 01-03-2008, 07:23 PM

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Originally Posted by NirvanaMan

Or that old dude from the diabetes commercials that can't say diabetes.

OMG. Wilford Brimley would be too damned funny. This totally seductive shower scene and then Wilford's voice coming in at the end. Bwahahaha!!

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Originally Posted by BarTopDancer

If you guys don't mind I can show it to a few marketing peoples in my office tomorrow for a fresh perspective.

Go for it! My plans are to finalize it tomorrow and upload it in the evening.

I have fixed the bottle suckage, and switched back to the second steamy shower.

I'm also toying with their stock music right now. It's SO overplayed from all the entries, but it is theirs....

(Thanks to everyone for all your insight and patience. I feel so, "Mom!! Look at me, Mom!! Look at this! Look at this!", which I know can be quite annoying.

)

Eliza Hodgkins 1812 · 01-03-2008, 07:24 PM

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Originally Posted by NirvanaMan

Or that old dude from the diabetes commercials that can't say diabetes.

Wilford Brimley!!!!

Motorboat Cruiser · 01-03-2008, 07:26 PM

Just my opinion but I think the "other" music clip works better for the piece than mine. Now, I'll go back and actually pay attention to the images.

Motorboat Cruiser · 01-03-2008, 07:27 PM

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Originally Posted by Disneyphile

OMG. Wilford Brimley would be too damned funny. This totally seductive shower scene and then Wilford's voice coming in at the end. Bwahahaha!!

Too bad someone doesn't have Gilbert Godfrey's phone number.

Snowflake · 01-03-2008, 07:30 PM

I liked take 2 and take 1. I was really taken with 2, however. Loved the fogged mirror. liked the music of 1, alot

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Alex · 01-03-2008, 07:45 PM

One little thing I like about Take 3 that is different from the first two.

At the end, with the text:

Enjoy a little luxury, everyday

<<Dove bottle>>

dovecreamoil.com

Your titles are exactly aligned and over the "Dove" label on the body wash bottle. I'm reading the text of the first line and it blends to the bottle and immediately, with no eye movement at all I'm reading the brand name, and then without eye movement I am reading the action prompt (dovecreamoil.com).

In the other takes they are close but not really aligned.

Kevy Baby · 01-03-2008, 07:46 PM

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Originally Posted by Disneyphile

OMG. Wilford Brimley would be too damned funny. This totally seductive shower scene and then Wilford's voice coming in at the end. Bwahahaha!!

How about Don LaFontaine?

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Originally Posted by Snowflake

to all involved

I, um, looked at the camera when it was being unloaded...

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BarTopDancer Prepping... Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Here, there, everywhere Posts: 11,405	The 3rd one is great! My two things are the product getting sucked back into the bottle and I am really distracted by the movement in the end. The level of fog isn't to much, or to little but the movement is to much. If you guys don't mind I can show it to a few marketing peoples in my office tomorrow for a fresh perspective. __________________ Spork is the new MacGyver Postcards From My Edge
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Morrigoon I throw stones at houses Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Location: Location Posts: 9,534	Honestly? Submit all 3. I like them all for various reasons. Although I agree, take those extra "sucking" frames out of take 3 first. Maybe give the extra moments to your initial titles. __________________ http://bash.org/?top "It is useless for sheep to pass a resolution in favor of vegetarianism while wolves remain of a different opinion." -- William Randolph Inge
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Motorboat Cruiser Cruiser of Motorboats Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: So Cal Posts: 3,665	Just my opinion but I think the "other" music clip works better for the piece than mine. Now, I'll go back and actually pay attention to the images.
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01-03-2008, 07:30 PM	#78
Snowflake lost in the fog Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: San Francisco Posts: 7,831	I liked take 2 and take 1. I was really taken with 2, however. Loved the fogged mirror. liked the music of 1, alot to all involved __________________ Be yourself; everyone else is already taken. - Oscar Wilde
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01-03-2008, 07:45 PM	#79
Alex . Join Date: Feb 2005 Posts: 13,354	One little thing I like about Take 3 that is different from the first two. At the end, with the text: Enjoy a little luxury, everyday <<Dove bottle>> dovecreamoil.com Your titles are exactly aligned and over the "Dove" label on the body wash bottle. I'm reading the text of the first line and it blends to the bottle and immediately, with no eye movement at all I'm reading the brand name, and then without eye movement I am reading the action prompt (dovecreamoil.com). In the other takes they are close but not really aligned.
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