Dove Contest - Take 1 (Need Feedback ASAP!!)

Cadaverous Pallor · 01-03-2008, 10:14 AM

Heehee! I don't think I can have much perspective on this because my initial reaction is "that doesn't look like a commercial because that's ME!"

Anyway, I'd agree with the above. Cut the squeezing scene a bit. I'd slow down the part where I'm washing my shoulders/neck, I'm moving too fast against the slow music.

I also agree with Brad on the last shot - I was like, dude, what am I washing??

Did any of the rest of it look better? I know I tried to wash visibly (back and arms) but of course I have no idea what it looked like from your side.

Is the pink bottle part of the stock footage? The fact that it doesn't match the ivory colored bottle we used is a kind of a shame.

I wish my hair looked better, and I wish there was time for a reshoot!

But all the angles are great, the dropping soap looked better than I imagined. I disagree with Alex on the music, I think it matches the theme of luxury very well.

Can't wait for the second draft!

Kevy Baby · 01-03-2008, 10:25 AM

I had to watch without sound as I am still stuck in a cubicle farm.

The only thing I would add is that the transitions need to be smoother - most of them seem quite abrupt. This may be because it is an early cut, but I thougth I would mention it.

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Originally Posted by zapppop

Can't see it.

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Originally Posted by innerSpaceman

Sorry, it won't play for me either.

Once it downloaded, I just clicked on the QuickTime logo and the player popped up. Hopefully that helps.

01-03-2008, 10:14 AM	#1
Cadaverous Pallor ohhhh baby Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Parental Bliss Posts: 12,364	Heehee! I don't think I can have much perspective on this because my initial reaction is "that doesn't look like a commercial because that's ME!" Anyway, I'd agree with the above. Cut the squeezing scene a bit. I'd slow down the part where I'm washing my shoulders/neck, I'm moving too fast against the slow music. I also agree with Brad on the last shot - I was like, dude, what am I washing?? Did any of the rest of it look better? I know I tried to wash visibly (back and arms) but of course I have no idea what it looked like from your side. Is the pink bottle part of the stock footage? The fact that it doesn't match the ivory colored bottle we used is a kind of a shame. I wish my hair looked better, and I wish there was time for a reshoot! But all the angles are great, the dropping soap looked better than I imagined. I disagree with Alex on the music, I think it matches the theme of luxury very well. Can't wait for the second draft! __________________ The second star to the right shines in the night for you
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