Dove Contest - Take 1 (Need Feedback ASAP!!)

BarTopDancer · 01-03-2008, 04:44 PM

I really like the 2nd cut! It's fantastic!

I didn't notice the verbiage change until you pointed it out, but I do like "drop" after the soap drop. The cut to the oil/lotion mixture was a bit sudden and if there is a way you can move the focus off of Jen smiling at the product I'd suggest that as well.

As a woman (and that is who I presume the target market is

) I like the last scene. The mirror is a bit foggy but you can still see motion. However, it's not suggesting that we hop in the shower and have sex with Jen. It's suggesting that we use this product and relax. Then again, looking at chix in the mirror while they shower isn't one of my fantasies.

I also prefer this cut of music. It's very relaxing.

It's fantastic. I'll take a look at the others when I get home.

01-03-2008, 04:44 PM	#11
BarTopDancer Prepping... Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Here, there, everywhere Posts: 11,405	I really like the 2nd cut! It's fantastic! I didn't notice the verbiage change until you pointed it out, but I do like "drop" after the soap drop. The cut to the oil/lotion mixture was a bit sudden and if there is a way you can move the focus off of Jen smiling at the product I'd suggest that as well. As a woman (and that is who I presume the target market is ) I like the last scene. The mirror is a bit foggy but you can still see motion. However, it's not suggesting that we hop in the shower and have sex with Jen. It's suggesting that we use this product and relax. Then again, looking at chix in the mirror while they shower isn't one of my fantasies. I also prefer this cut of music. It's very relaxing. It's fantastic. I'll take a look at the others when I get home. __________________ Spork is the new MacGyver Postcards From My Edge Last edited by BarTopDancer : 01-03-2008 at 04:50 PM.
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